*squinting really really hard*
That is seriously mild slash，I‘ve been reading PWPs, this level of citrus isn't nearly enough.
Overall IC, a bit short though. Commendable effort, seeing as you probably are better with long and convoluted plots.
I've decided that I'm not gonna bother with Chinese anymore. I'm just not in the mood.
Forgive me if it is a bit harsh. It was short, so there's not enough impact. And I on't really know what to say. Again, low impact. You should work on that.作者: 彼墨楔 時間: 2014-11-28 21:34 10#雪陵
Not in the mood to reply in Chinese too, the tone is too different to feel comfortable if I do that, so there.
That, is a horrible translation for sap and fluff, seriously. *dead-pan face*
It's my first slash fic, what do you expect? Really trying to tone down the word count though, and I know you (and me too) are used to long fics that are, frankly, quite epic~ Personally think it's a good first-shot at short fics. I really don't want to write a 4000-plus character one so close to...something important in school. Check the date, was it close to a test or something?
At least its IC, I really dislike OOC ^^
My long and extremely complicated plots never reach their end, and you're one big reason for that XD
I'll try, but really? It's hard to cram impact into that itty-bitty piece, what with the using-extremely-long-sentences-to-describe-things thing I have going on. Still working on it XDD
